He rubbed the apple against his shirt and took a bite. The apple made a sound in his mouth. The juice dripped down his chin.
Which revision best uses words that appeal to the senses?
O 1. He rubbed the apple against his shirt and took a bite. It made a loud sound in his mouth. The juice from the apple dripped down his
chin
2. He rubbed the red apple against his shirt until it was shiny and took a big bite. It made a loud crunch in his mouth. The apple juice
trickled down his chin in little drips.
O 3. He rubbed the red apple against his shirt and took a large bite that made a big sound. His chin got apple juice on it.
O 4. He rubbed the apple against his shirt to clean it. He took a big bite. There was a loud sound. He felt the juice from the apple on his
chin.