The Grimms’ fairy tales address the experiences of people who are living in difficult situations. For example, there is the story of Rapunzel. There is also the story of Hansel and Gretel, who had to escape their house in order to find food and were locked out.Which revision would best help the author support the thesis more effectively?

Let's take the example of Hansel and Gretel. Let's say that instead of the ending of the witch getting thrown into the stove and the kids escaping successfully, let's pretend both of the kids died there inside of the candy home.

Applying To The Problem

Now, let's see if this helps the author support the thesis more effectively? First of all, what is the thesis of Hansel and Gretel? Well, it's mainly that "looks can be deceiving," right? We're talking about the house here. Does the different ending I mentioned above help this thesis?

Exploring Different Options

Not quite. Let's pick a different ending. Maybe, instead, the parents didn't let the kids wander outside at all. Or maybe the parents started off with a lot of money, so the kids wouldn't have to stay outside in the first place. Or, even better, the kids weren't tempted by candy and didn't even go into the house in the beginning. Let's take that example.

Focusing On One Example

This definitely helps the author support the thesis, because if people weren't so tempted by things so easily, this story would have ended up much better. But, it's only a story.

I hope this helped!