The killer clowns Chapter 3
One week after Rosa’s death, the clowns had the world completely under their control.


Estella had just heard the news of Rosa’s death and was devastated. “Oh Rosa,” Estella cried, looking forlorn “Why did you have to mess with Pennywise?” Then she went to a dusty trunk in the corner “I vowed never to open this chest ever again… but I have to save Rosa.” Estella pulled out a dusty spell book and set it on the table. She flipped to the page about bringing people back to life. “The blood of the killer poured into the mouth of the killed shall raise the dead man from his earthy bed.” Estella read. She went to Pennywise’s lair and collected a little bit of his blood.


Later, at the graveyard, Estella was pouring the blood of Pennywise into Rosa’s mouth. Rosa immediately opened her eyes, while her arms grew back, “Estella, where am I? what happened?” Rosa said, looking around. “Rosa, you must kill Pennywise, before EVERYONE dies!” “Ok,” said Rosa “ I will try.” Rosa then went home and gathered her weapons, put her brass knuckles on, and went to Pennywise’s lair.

When she got there, Rosa started to have second thoughts, but she kept on moving. There was blood splattered across the walls, dismembered body parts all over the place, and torture devices on a stage in the far corner. But she kept moving till she got to Pennywise’s throne. “HEY, PENNYWISE” Rosa yelled “ YOU ARE SO UGLY THAT WHEN YOU WERE BORN, THE DOCTOR SLAPPED YOUR MOTHER.” “Rosa” Pennywise snarled “didn’t I kill you already?” Rosa then conjured a whirlwind around her and flew to Pennywise, “yeah and you will have to do it again” she said and then stabbed Pennywise in the heart, took out all of the clowns, and saved anymore innocent people from a cruel death for the clowns entertainment.


the end or is it?

Respuesta :

I cant really tell if you’re sharing your writing, or asking a question..but you have some good writing skills!

Answer:

Ooh ok, so you're adding supernatural activity to your story now. Things are starting to get more intriguing :D

Also, I really like Rosa's personality and sense of humor. That's a nice touch to an adventure/thriller story, if I do say so myself.

Explanation:

I'm glad that you added another character to the mix, but you really could've done more with her. Not to mention everytime you add someone to your story, you have to at least introduce your readers to them somehow. For example: how does Rosa know Estella? And where did she get the spell book from? You don't have to go into too much detail with her, if you don't want to, but at least some explanation would be nice.

Hope this helps you, I'll probably even give you more tips and heads-ups in comments, when I can think of more. Either way, keep up the good work! :)