I think if you just opened your introduction with a “hook” or a sentence that captures the readers attention would be better. A better “hook” sentence that I can give is: Two literary works best conveyed nature in their own manner, one called “The Calypso Borealis,” an essay written by John Miller called and a poem written by William Wordsworth’s called “I Wandered Lonely as a Cloud,”
From there, post this-The authors of Calypso Borealis and Wandered Lonely as a Cloud not only through the diction vocabulary , and syntax, but also through the impact of tone, and mood, and while both authors express their relationship in different ways there is still the essence of them impact on the audience . and fix the sentence avoiding run -ons.
